Not Dead Yet

This morning, I got an idea that I think will salvage the scene I was going to delete. There’s a character in the first half of the scene who didn’t necessarily need to be there — most of the work of the first half didn’t involve him. In addition, he tells Ennevel, the POV character, something, a little bit of gossip involving her sister. I think the second half of the scene is stronger if Ennevel doesn’t have that little piece of information. Instead of being shown something she already knows, she’s shown something she didn’t expect and, to some degree, needs to figure out.

So I cut the character and his little bit of gossip out. We’ll see if that leads to a fix and a salvage of the scene.

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